Thursday, February 11, 2016

The Balloon and the Cloud



The Balloon and the Cloud


Every day I would rise up into the sky

Where I looked up and saw you

Floating there alone all by yourself

I would try to power myself up to you

So we could talk

Talk about all the things we love

But I couldn’t always rise up to you

So maybe you’d drift down to meet me

And then we would talk

We would talk

Talk about all the thing we love

But when you’d cry

And rain would fall from you

I would kick my hot air into second gear

And rise up to you

To make sure you only saw sunny days

I wish I had risen up to you every day

But I was afraid

Afraid of what the other balloons will think

And afraid of what you will think

You drifted away from me

And you met another balloon

A balloon I recognized

A balloon that now does what I couldn’t

A balloon that could rise up to you

A balloon that will float with you

A balloon you will float with

I lowered my hot air

And begin to float down away from you

But from down below

I can still see you

With the balloon you’re now happy with

But whenever you cry and it begins to rain

I still kick my hot air into second gear and rise to you

To make sure that you still only see sunny days

And I will still try to power myself up to you whenever I can

To talk to you about all the things we love

Because every day

I will still rise up into to the sky

To see you


7 comments:

  1. I really like how this poem makes a connection between these two objects. It works well because these two things are similar in some way, so it works well.

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  2. Ishaan, I really like the story you are telling. What really stood out is that you just wanted to see the balloon happy! You make a lot of good connections in this poem, nice job.

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  3. I think talking about hot air balloons is really creative and unique. The poem is really good in general too.

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  4. I really liked the metaphors in your poem, and that you have a really dramatic and nice ending.

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  5. I like how the poem ends nicely and has a lasting impression.

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  6. Your choice of objects was interesting and fun, and the extended metaphor works well.

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  7. Your poem was well thought out and very well written. I liked the metaphors.

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